There is a new feature on Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, where a masterpiece by one of the classic haiku poets is a source of our inspiration to compose a haiku. This time it is a well known haiku by Matsuo Basho:
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the old pond (-)
a frog jumps in
sound of water
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Here’ s mine where I try to follow these classical rules:
1. 5-7-5 syllables
2. a kigo (or seasonword)
3. a kireji (or cutting word, in Western languages mostly interpunction)
4. a moment as short as the sound of a pebble thrown into water
5. a deeper meaning (could be Zen-Buddhistic or other spiritual or religious thought)
6. and the first and the third line are interchangeable.
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tea ceremony
among swishing kimonos
a glimpse of pale wrist
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Absolute perfection 🙂
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And that glimpse is perfectly mastered… indeed..
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A glimpse of a geisha’s wrist … what a wonderful traditional haiku Ese.
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revealing only a little
but so sensuous
cheers
JzB
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Masterfully done my friend. That glimpse! 🙂
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A very popular haiku has now had a new different sound with your slightly familiar words. I like it.
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wow ! i am speechless ! a masterpiece !
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